J. Haux

I thought it was amusing: I liked the characters. It was creative, written by a twelve-year-old with a good imagination, but without a lot of experience. There could have been ...

Henry was never really a nice man, though he tried to be. He was very ambitious, and with his ambition, he had the potential to be very dangerous. His mind ...

I like it, Lilac! But I don't have very many critiques, so I'll resort to structural and grammatical suggestions! :D And, why hadn’t they fought to keep me? Why hadn’t ...

I would say "memoir", actually. you mean "mildly autobiographical" as in partly fictional, or that it's not quite an autobiography? :? I love your descriptions, especially when he's tapping on ...

Hi. First off, I'm going to say that this is a big step up from the first (official) post. It's more exciting. We still aren't clear on what's going on, ...

It almost seems to easy that Ness only has to envision what she wants, and voila! It happens. But I trust you. You'll make this interesting. :D Yes, cut down ...

Yeah...Some of the sarcasm didn't feel natural. There are some little things you might rephrase, etc...but that'll come later. :) Maybe it's not important to the story, but she said ...

I'm going to do some repeating, too. :wink: Fun stuff! I know you were writing freely-sometimes that's how the best story starters happen (*cough* I do that a lot). I'm ...

:o! What are you suggesting about Americans, Bubble?! :wink: I now undersand the toilet humor comment. *laugh* Don't worry about the lost title. You may have changed it anyway. A ...